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- Cut down and condense - Think how i could do things . A. planting flower (orchid/ Lilly) when eyes start to bleed . C. Crushed the flower and tells A. She doesn't have long to live . They travel through a field and talk briefly of childhood memories in the field .childhood memory in the field w/ A singing over it . They reach a lake were they decide to settle . Saturn devouring his son is reflected in the lake for C. (Surreal) . They talk directly and indirectly about the event/ memory with a misunderstanding due to different perspectives of the event/ memory . They talk of a childhood memory at the lake . We see parts of A's version of events . We see parts of C's version of events . These violently clash with the childhood memory . An orchid floats down the lake and is engulfed by ant, leaving a pelvic bone or pile of bones . At the height of the violence (memories) C. Stabs A. . On her dying wish A. Is taken to the field where she dies after revealin...