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. A. planting flower (orchid/ Lilly) when eyes start to bleed
. C. Crushed the flower and tells A. She doesn't have long to live
. They travel through a field and talk briefly of childhood memories in the field
.childhood memory in the field w/ A singing over it
. They reach a lake were they decide to settle
. Saturn devouring his son is reflected in the lake for C. (Surreal)
. They talk directly and indirectly about the event/ memory with a misunderstanding due to different perspectives of the event/ memory
. They talk of a childhood memory at the lake
. We see parts of A's version of events
. We see parts of C's version of events
. These violently clash with the childhood memory
. An orchid floats down the lake and is engulfed by ant, leaving a pelvic bone or pile of bones
. At the height of the violence (memories) C. Stabs A.
. On her dying wish A. Is taken to the field where she dies after revealing the tragic truth of the memory which C. Had misunderstood/ misinterpreted
. Roots extend from the ground and engulf A.
. C. Is devastated and returns to the lake floating herself down it